Je viens d'écrire un brouillon pour mon oral blanc d'anglais (bac). Pourriez-vous me dire si j'ai fait des fautes svp ? merci :) Let's talk about Spaces and exc
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Je viens d'écrire un brouillon pour mon oral blanc d'anglais (bac). Pourriez-vous me dire si j'ai fait des fautes svp ? merci :)
Let's talk about Spaces and exchanges. There are 2 kind of Spaces : the real Spaces and the virtual Spaces. The first one take place in the world. Moreover, it can be places to explore like new territories or new land. But also places which are already inhabited. The second one are associated with internet, TV, radio, video games et cetera. A lot of exchanges exist on these area. You can have social exchange in order to communicate with people all over the world. Besides you can inform you about what shake the world. As well as, thanks to video games, you create a life of your own which allow you to escape reality. In a realler area, tausend people travel every day in order to exchange goods, information. Also, People have the opportunity to live abroad, go sight-seeing and trade. However, there are difference between virtual and real exchange. Virtual exchanges are created few year ago contrary to real exchanges which exist, of course, since humanity is born. But they gained in speed. It enables to talk with a person who is far away for us without move from our house. In a more professional use, campagny control all their firm abroad in a context of globalisation. In that way, economic exchanges are the most important part of globalisation. Although it create link between countries, it dammages the environment because of most of vehicles use petrol and pollute atmospher.
In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 3 documents. The first document focuses on a major issue which is immigration in the US. On this cartoon, we notice the presence of Pilgrins Father who are the first Europeens who went to the US in order to created America. The place where they arrived is Plymouth Rock as show it the picture. In spite of the fact that Europeens came on Native-Americans' Territory, these last didn't build a fence to prevent the founding father from entering the US. However, the cartoonist drew this in order to expose his disapproval about the current immigration policy of the USA. Indeed, if Native-Americans was built a fence, America would not be as it's today. Nevertheless, the US are building a wall between Mexico and the US to prevent Mexican from crossing the border. Thus, they want to stop flow of people. Therefore, they want to stop culture exchanges, language exchanges et cetera. To my mind, the cartoonist wanted to expose the bad side of the US. The US is a Land of immigration but the fact that they build a wall to stop immigration is quiet paradoxical.
As second document I have chosen is a poster which promote a water. The slogan is written in English and Spanish. Thus, it's a mixture of Spanish and English which is called Spanglish. Spanglish is a hybrid language created by Latino community which live in the US. It exists for a long time but now, it becomes a « ad-lingo » as show this poster. As the latinos community is the largest minority in the US, marketers target this part of the population which has a significant purchasing power. In addition to Spanglish is a evidence of integration of Latinos into a multicultural society. Indeed, it points out that there are exchanges between english and spanish speaking communities. As well as it cleary underlines the fact that this language is not a fixed, rigid institution but it's constantly modified and andopted for and by the population who uses it. I'm well aware that it's hard to be integrated but this example shows that it's possible.
Finally, for the last document, I chose a video entitled « Why should you be considering a gap year ? ». As suggest this title, the main aim of the video is to incite us to take a gap year. This video is a type of speed drawing where a person speaks when drawing. He assumes that taking a gap year is a life-changing experience. Indeed, according to him, people who have completed a gap year have gained some crucial life skill and experience. Moreover, a gap year allows students to discover the world. Therefore, they speak with other students, people in another countries that they will never meet if they didn't do a gap year.
To conclude, in the 3 documents, the idea put forward is that exchanges enable to improve the world where we live. In the first one, Native-Americans helpt Pilgrin Father in order to they survive. In the second, Exchange are a factor of integration in their adopted country. Eventually, in the last one, Exchanges can help student. Indeed, thanks to it, they can take a better decision on their studies.
Let's talk about Spaces and exchanges. There are 2 kind of Spaces : the real Spaces and the virtual Spaces. The first one take place in the world. Moreover, it can be places to explore like new territories or new land. But also places which are already inhabited. The second one are associated with internet, TV, radio, video games et cetera. A lot of exchanges exist on these area. You can have social exchange in order to communicate with people all over the world. Besides you can inform you about what shake the world. As well as, thanks to video games, you create a life of your own which allow you to escape reality. In a realler area, tausend people travel every day in order to exchange goods, information. Also, People have the opportunity to live abroad, go sight-seeing and trade. However, there are difference between virtual and real exchange. Virtual exchanges are created few year ago contrary to real exchanges which exist, of course, since humanity is born. But they gained in speed. It enables to talk with a person who is far away for us without move from our house. In a more professional use, campagny control all their firm abroad in a context of globalisation. In that way, economic exchanges are the most important part of globalisation. Although it create link between countries, it dammages the environment because of most of vehicles use petrol and pollute atmospher.
In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 3 documents. The first document focuses on a major issue which is immigration in the US. On this cartoon, we notice the presence of Pilgrins Father who are the first Europeens who went to the US in order to created America. The place where they arrived is Plymouth Rock as show it the picture. In spite of the fact that Europeens came on Native-Americans' Territory, these last didn't build a fence to prevent the founding father from entering the US. However, the cartoonist drew this in order to expose his disapproval about the current immigration policy of the USA. Indeed, if Native-Americans was built a fence, America would not be as it's today. Nevertheless, the US are building a wall between Mexico and the US to prevent Mexican from crossing the border. Thus, they want to stop flow of people. Therefore, they want to stop culture exchanges, language exchanges et cetera. To my mind, the cartoonist wanted to expose the bad side of the US. The US is a Land of immigration but the fact that they build a wall to stop immigration is quiet paradoxical.
As second document I have chosen is a poster which promote a water. The slogan is written in English and Spanish. Thus, it's a mixture of Spanish and English which is called Spanglish. Spanglish is a hybrid language created by Latino community which live in the US. It exists for a long time but now, it becomes a « ad-lingo » as show this poster. As the latinos community is the largest minority in the US, marketers target this part of the population which has a significant purchasing power. In addition to Spanglish is a evidence of integration of Latinos into a multicultural society. Indeed, it points out that there are exchanges between english and spanish speaking communities. As well as it cleary underlines the fact that this language is not a fixed, rigid institution but it's constantly modified and andopted for and by the population who uses it. I'm well aware that it's hard to be integrated but this example shows that it's possible.
Finally, for the last document, I chose a video entitled « Why should you be considering a gap year ? ». As suggest this title, the main aim of the video is to incite us to take a gap year. This video is a type of speed drawing where a person speaks when drawing. He assumes that taking a gap year is a life-changing experience. Indeed, according to him, people who have completed a gap year have gained some crucial life skill and experience. Moreover, a gap year allows students to discover the world. Therefore, they speak with other students, people in another countries that they will never meet if they didn't do a gap year.
To conclude, in the 3 documents, the idea put forward is that exchanges enable to improve the world where we live. In the first one, Native-Americans helpt Pilgrin Father in order to they survive. In the second, Exchange are a factor of integration in their adopted country. Eventually, in the last one, Exchanges can help student. Indeed, thanks to it, they can take a better decision on their studies.
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Let's talk about Spaces and exchanges. There are 2 kind of Spaces : the real Spaces and the virtual Spaces. The first one take place in the world (both take place in the world). Moreover, it can be places to explore like new territories or a new land.(a continuing sentence, don't use a full stop) But also places (or might be places) which are already inhabited. The second form of spaces and exchanges are associated with internet, TV, radio, video games et cetera. A lot of exchanges exist on these area (platforms) . You can have social exchange and (in order implies reason fro something) communicate with people all over the world. Besides it can inform you about what shook the world. As well as (inappropriate use of word phrases), thanks to video games, you can create a life of your own (a virtual life)which allows you to escape reality. In a realer ("more real" is better and more formal) area (scenario) , tausend (thousands of) people travel every day in order to exchange goods, information. Also, due to these exchanges, People (should begin with a small letter) have the opportunity to live abroad, go sight-seeing and trade. However, there are differences between virtual and real exchange. Virtual exchanges are (were) (mind the tense) created few years ago contrary to the real exchanges which have existed, of course, since humanity was (mind the tense) born. But they gained in speed (the speed in which the exchanges occur, however, have developed drastically). It enables people to talk to others who are far away from them without moving out of the house. In a more professional use, companies can control all their firms abroad in a context of globalisation. In that way, economic exchanges have become the most important part of globalisation (you haven't really given the reason why). Although it creates (in a continuous tens...as the action is still continuing to date) links between countries, the environment ends up being polluted through the various means used in the exchanges such as the vehicles used in transportation.
In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 3 documents. The first document focuses on a major issue which is immigration in the US. It is a cartoon, in which we notice the presence of the (being specific) Pilgrim Fathers who were the first Europeans who went to the US and created America. The place where they first arrived was Plymouth Rock as shown in the picture. In spite of the fact that Europeans came on Native-Americans' Territory, the latter didn't build a fence to prevent the founding fathers from entering the US. However, the cartoonist drew this in order to expose his disapproval about the current immigration policy of the USA. Indeed, if Native-Americans had built a fence, America would not be as it's today. Nevertheless, the US is (referring to the single nation) building a wall between Mexico and the US to prevent Mexicans from crossing the border. Thus, they want to stop the flow of people which may consequently lead to the end of culture exchanges, language exchanges et cetera between the two nations. To my mind (in my view is a better choice, or in my opinion), the cartoonist wanted to expose the bad side of the US. The US is a Land of immigration but the fact that they build a wall to stop immigration is quiet paradoxical (..is a land of immigration but it is ironical that they're building a wall to stop immigration).
As second document I have chosen is a poster which promotes a water. The slogan is written in English and Spanish. Thus, it's a mixture of Spanish and English which is called Spanglish. Spanglish is a hybrid language created by Latino community which live in the US. It exists for a long time but now, it becomes a "ad-lingo" (use quotation marks) as show in this poster. As the Latino community is the largest minority in the US, marketers target this part of the population which has a significant purchasing power. In addition to it, Spanglish is an evidence of integration of Latinos into a multicultural society. Indeed, it points out that there are exchanges between English and Spanish speaking communities. As well as clearly underlining the fact that this language is not a fixed, rigid institution but it's constantly modified and adopted for and by the population who uses it. I'm (better use "you're") well aware that it's hard to be integrated but this example shows that it's possible.
Note: Correctly apply the phrases you use.
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